Monologue Changes

The monologue section in our film, we just learnt, is probably the most important part in portraying what is actually happening in the storyline. We were told by Mr Andrews that our story is as clear as it could be so we manipulated the wording and information that we exposed through this monologue that Charlie speaks to make the link between the Rumpelstilskin storyline even more clear.

This is the monologue before the change. 

Charlie:

Detective Stilts. I’ve been working on this project for 3 months. Company Name: SpinStraw Incorporated. Founder: Veronica King. Accomplice: Anna.. Unknown sir name.    Their company forges money and assassinates anyone who finds out about it. I’m in a risky situation.  Anna has blackmailed me to hep her take over the illegal business by finding dirt to blackmail Veronica. I have a feeling that Veronica knows what’s happening. I could potentially be killed but the money I’m getting is too good to back out now. 

This is the monologue after the moderation.

Charlie:

I’ve been working undercover on this case for 3 months with limited success.

Veronica King a wealthy… appears to be in charge. Her accomplice Anna is trying some kind of power play. They are counterfeiting and laundering money through a number of shell companies. Anyone who stands in their finds their employment…. terminated. I’m in a risky situation. Anna knows who I am and has blackmailed me to help her push Victoria out. I have a feeling that Veronica knows what’s happening. Anna is pushing me hard.I feel like she expects me to spin straw into gold. I could potentially be killed but the money I’m getting is too good to back out now. 

I feel like now the information that we're getting across is clearer and very relevant to what is happening.

Film Noir Feedback (Test Block)

During our test block schedule, Mr Andrews gave us a few pointers on our film to make it look better and tighter.

• Make some shots a little more canted (so it doesn't look like a mistake)
• Make sure shots are either straight or completely canted
• Gunshot flash needs to be added to make it look realistic
• Unclear who is who (Veronica King? Introduce her character)
• Narration from Charlie to make character clearer "Been working this case for months after stumbling across clues from other crime scenes." "After following some leads I've been drawn to this man and the only way to look into the case any further is to see what's happening from the inside."
• Anna says she feels like she was promised byVeronica
• Charlie narrates "I feel like I'm being used. It's funny how it's called Spin Straw Inc. as if we were making money out of thin air. I'm into this case so deep, this better be worth it." "I feel like Anna asks for the impossible."
• Get another peer (not in our group) to watch it and give some feedback
• Money forging -> Counterfeiting racket
• Charlie: frustration and crankiness in voice "laundering money"

Progress 9th Nov. 2015

Today, in class, Bella, Minnie and I are beginning to record voice overs for our film. Things we need to be cautious of are:

• Specific lip sync timing with the visuals
• Tone of voice & Characterisation
• Clarity; no crackling or fuzzing sounds in the background

By the end of the hour, we had finished recording all of Anna's (Minnie's) voice overs for the short film. Out next objective is to record all of Charlie's (mine) voice overs, then when Libby eventually recovers from her surgery from today, she can do her voice overs.

Dialogue wasn't a crucial part of film noir but we thought that it would really help enhance the delivery of the storyline, plot and the entire short film altogether.

Reflection 6th Nov. 2015

Today in class, we realised that Bella had issues with sorting Libraries and Events into Final Cut Pro (actually I shouldn't blame it on Bella because she tried, and Minnie and I didn't pick her up on it but anywayyy!). Mr Andrews spent quite a bit of the lesson helping us sort out our shots of our scenes so as we can organise them properly to illuminate the risk of potentially losing all of our shots and our film.

We wanted to do some voice overs during the lesson but Mr Powell wasn't in his office so we emailed him asking when a suitable time is. We really want to get good quality audio so it doesn't make our film seem dodgy, and Mr Powell has a very impressive sound system in his office (I might be jealous).

Over the weekend, my group and I need to come together to film the last bit of our film that yet needs to be filmed. And next week we will meet with Mr Powell for audio. Unfortunately, it's highly likely that Libby is unable to continue working with us on this project because she has a knee surgery on Monday, so, as a group, Bella, Minnie and I must pull our weight and work together to finish this film as quickly as possible.

"The Golden Rule" Conference

FTVNM Conference 2/11/16

In class today, Bella, Minnie and I showed Mr Andrews our film so far and received some feedback to make it better. Unfortunately, Libby is at home today because she dislocated her knee and isn't able to film with us. However, we need to work around things like this. (Good thing we filmed all of her walking shots before the accident). Here are some dot points that I jotted down while Mr Andrews was watching our film.

• Shots need to flow better
• Voice over will enhance it & will give indication on how much tighter it can be
• Must record voice over ASAP
• Crop some shots in the last scene
• Guns: Add muzzle flash/BANG (photoshop)

Progress Shots in SpinStraw Inc.

Filming progress

Wednesday 28th Oct.

Here are some pictures of some shots that we filmed that day. For explanation of these shots, go to Bella's blog :)

http://ipatonftvnm.blogspot.com.au

Progress Shots in SpinStraw Inc.

Filming progress
Monday 26th Oct.

Here are some pictures of some shots that we filmed that day. For explanation of these shots, go to Bella's blog :)

http://ipatonftvnm.blogspot.com.au

Shots We Still Need To Film

Here is a table of shots that Bella had sent me that consist of all of the shots that my group and I still need to shoot. This makes it easier for us to know what we have shot and what we still have to go. After this, we are able to go back and look at some shots that we may need to re-film (which would be a nightmare for us but if it has to be done, it has to be done).

Group Work Reflection

I think that my group and I work reasonably well. We all have different kinds of creativity and ideas to input into our film. Minnie is a good actress and inputs some ideas into storyline, she's also very honest when we may have taken a really bad shot or something just isn't right. Bella is super duper organised; she always reminds us when to pick up the tripod, lights and camera. She also doesn't mind taking props home, and she always makes time to be creative with some shots that we took. Bella and I work (weirdly) together. I have trouble with coming up with some new and creative shots, so Bella does that, and a very good job of it too. Then, I bounce off of her ideas and make them more symbolic, and add a little more spice to them, if that makes sense. I am also a perfectionist so if something is out of whack or a little dodgy, I suggest ways to make the shot look more clean. Libby is also a very hard worker, she gets her work done and is probably as organised as Bella. She also lives really close to where I am, only a tram-ride away. So we get together on weekends to get our FTVNM work finished together.

I really think our group is well-organised and we input different things to our film. We bounce off each other and make sure that we are on top of things.

Monday 19th Oct. Shots

Long shot: to establish where the car is (Charlie's driveway). 

Dark lighting: night time after Charlie has got back from his first day working undercover at the money company. Straight on angle: to show the car slowly driving into the driveway. 

High angle: To show that Charlie is vulnerable. This alludes/foreshadows to the fact that Charlie may be manipulated and be a victim later in the film.

Dark lighting: night time after Charlie has got back from his first day working undercover at the money company. Mid shot: to show the car in more detail. 

Extreme close up: to reveal that Charlie is writing in a notepad. This shot is pretty crucial to this scene.

Dark lighting: night time after Charlie has got back from his first day working undercover at the money company. High angle: to show that Charlie is writing in a notepad.

Mid shot: to show a different angle of Charlie in his car and show both Charlie and the car in some detail.

Dark lighting: night time after Charlie has got back from his first day working undercover at the money company. Straight on angle. 

Close up: to show Charlie's face in detail

Dark lighting: night time after Charlie has got back from his first day working undercover at the money company, High angle: To show that Charlie is vulnerable. This alludes/foreshadows to the fact that Charlie may be manipulated and be a victim later in the film.

Straight on angle: to show that Charlie is getting out of the car

Dark lighting: night time after Charlie has got back from his first day working undercover at the money company, Long shot: to show the bigger picture of the scene. 

Extreme long shot: This shows the whole creepy, dark and dingy location that Charlie and Anna are meeting in. Low angle: to show that the two characters are on the stairs

Dark lighting: to reveal that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Dark lighting: to reveal that this is a dark and creepy location

Close up: of Charlie's face and information exchange to show in detail what is happening.

High angle: to represent that Anna has more power than Charlie. It also alludes/foreshadows the fact that Charlie will be killed later in the film. 

Low angle: to make Anna look powerful.

Close up: to connect to the last close up of Charlie's face and represent how much more powerful Anna is to Charlie.

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Long shot: high angle to represent that this 'victim' is vulnerable

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Long shot: to represent the perspective of the assassin, high angle to represent that this 'victim' is vulnerable, Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Long shot: to represent the perspective of the assassin

High angle: to represent that this 'victim' is vulnerable

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Extreme close up: to show the "death ring"

High angle: Annas perspective as she looks down on the victim

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Mid shot: to show libby and her location in some detail

Straight on angle.

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

High angle: to represent that the character of Anna is in a vulnerable position

Mid shot to show the location and characters in some detail

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

High angle

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location

Close up: to show in detail what is happening as it is an important aspect of this film that the gun is stolen from Anna. 

High angle: to represent that Anna is in a vulnerable position as Veronica is holding a gun to her head

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Mid shot to show both Anna, the situation and the location. 

Low angle: to show that the character of Veronica is powerful

Close up to show her facial expressions in detail

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

High angle: to represent that Anna is in a vulnerable position as Veronica is holding a gun to her head

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Close up: to show that Anna has a plan. 

High angle: to represent that Anna is in a vulnerable position as Veronica is holding a gun to her head

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location.

Long shot: to show where the two characters are in more detail. 

Close up: to show Charlie's worried facial expression as she has just seen Veronica and Anna standing together.

High angle: to represent that the character of Charlie is vulnerable as he is about to be murdered

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location

Long shot to represent that this is from Veronica and Annas perspective.

Low angle: to represent that Veronica and Anna are more powerful than Charlie

Mid shot: to show Veronica and Anna from Charlie's perspective

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Mid shot: to show Charlie and the location in some detail

High angle: to represent that Charlie is vulnerable

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Low angle: to represent that Veronica and Anna are more powerful than Charlie.

Mid shot to show Veronica and Anna from Charlie's perspective

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Mid shot: to show Charlie and the location in some detail

High angle: to represent that Charlie is vulnerable

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Extreme close up: to show the "death ring" in detail

Straight on angle

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Low angle :to represent that Veronica and Anna are more powerful than Charlie

Mid shot: to show Veronica and Anna from Charlie's perspective

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Mid shot: to show Charlie and the location in some detail

High angle: to represent that Charlie is vulnerable

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Low angle: to represent that Veronica and Anna are more powerful than Charlie

Mid shot: to show Veronica and Anna from Charlie's perspective

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location. 

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location

Mid shot: to show both Anna and Veronica as well as the location in good detail

Straight on angle. 

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location

Straight on angle: so as not to make Anna look like she is being looked down on by Veronica

Mid shot: to show Anna in good detail and make it look as if Veronica is looking at her. 

Close up: to not show Veronica being actually shot so as not to break the Haynes code

Straight on angle

Dark lighting: to represent that this is a dark and creepy location.