Treatment Reflection

Before I hand in my final treatment, I had encountered a few things that I needed to fix.

Changing the tense to the present. The treatment has to be written like a visual story that is happening in the present. With enough description for the reader to understand and visualise it but not too much depth that it leaves room for imagination.

At first, I had written a very descriptive treatment. It was about 400 words over and it was very important for me to cut down on words to be within the word limit of 300-400 words. This was challenge for me having to choose which sections are less important then others and having to delete some of my very creative descriptions. A positive of this though, is that I have a very clear idea of what I want my trailer to look like.

Mr Andrews helped me with my treatment with verbal conferencing. Some things he pointed out were:

• Making the sentences flow is important. I can do this by combining sentences and there are many occasions where I could do this.
• I need to include more shots of the ordeal/difficult tasks throughout the trailer, including more shots of Georgia's anxiety beating her down on stage.
• I should read it out loud and make some slight changes of wording. By doing this, I can correct more issues of flow.